A reader shouldn’t have to read the story 2-3 times to learn the characters & their relationship to each other (including the 1st person telling the story). Starting off, to me it was so confusing, I didn’t even get deep into the story. Who is Kurk? Read.”mypenname3000, Tina Kerr 36, Louderthansound, to name a few to get the feel of what I’m trying to say to help you write better (for my slow mind). calm down and read the story a few times before postinganonymous readerReport 2011-02-03 05:27:10draaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaggggggeeedddd it out too long. Read.”mypenname3000, Tina Kerr 36, Louderthansound, to name a few to get the feel of what I’m trying to say to help you write better (for my slow mind). 1st comment incomplete!!!Dudley DowrongReport 2018-06-15 20:22:16I think you need to better identify & develop characters. 1st comment incomplete!!!Dudley DowrongReport 2018-06-15 20:22:16I think you need to better identify & develop characters.
