I look forward to seeing a revised story.«12» 10 comments«12»The Great TashReport 2018-10-28 11:36:58Great work!Bry83Report 2015-09-18 15:24:24Pretty good story not bad start.Anonymous readerReport 2014-07-06 05:58:42Totes make a large series out of it, I can see it becoming very entertaining. I look forward to seeing a revised story.«12» I stroked for a bit but the climax I’m sure will be in the next chapter. I look forward to seeing a revised story.«12» 10 comments«12»The Great TashReport 2018-10-28 11:36:58Great work!Bry83Report 2015-09-18 15:24:24Pretty good story not bad start.Anonymous readerReport 2014-07-06 05:58:42Totes make a large series out of it, I can see it becoming very entertaining. 10 comments«12»The Great TashReport 2018-10-28 11:36:58Great work!Bry83Report 2015-09-18 15:24:24Pretty good story not bad start.Anonymous readerReport 2014-07-06 05:58:42Totes make a large series out of it, I can see it becoming very entertaining. 10 comments«12»The Great TashReport 2018-10-28 11:36:58Great work!Bry83Report 2015-09-18 15:24:24Pretty good story not bad start.Anonymous readerReport 2014-07-06 05:58:42Totes make a large series out of it, I can see it becoming very entertaining. Keep writing!!TheOldmannReport 2012-06-14 20:49:54Thanks DFMCK, I lost myself a couple of times in that, but a nice beginning, have to watch out for that Iain, sound
