Stay Still, Brother, My Lust Is Rising Now

The basic premise of the story is actually decent. The technical stuff like grammar, punctuation and credible detail writing can be had by asking your english teachers for some help.anonymous readerReport 2012-10-07 02:08:56starts off good. The basic premise of the story is actually decent. The basic premise of the story is actually decent. details are what make it a better story-at least, in my opinion. Think about how you’d tell this story if you were in a room full of inquisitive and like minded people – you’d start slow, and build up to a conclusion by filling up your story with descriptions so your listeners would be able to imagine being you in this story. My aim is to make you better. details are what make it a better story-at least, in my opinion. Pay attention to my criticism. But I didn’t like your story because you rushed right into sex, and rushed thru it.