The use of the passive voice when she made her tea felt distant and pulled me away. Would James have given a more precise location? Cya later:)
Thel20anonymous readerReport 2012-02-07 05:33:58I loved this–most eiepcsally the uncertainty of it. Or would the narrator have questioned that he didn’t? A couple of things threw me: James wants to meet at Central Park – Even though it’s been damanged in this piece, Central Park is huge. Your last line is just beautiful. With the initial read, I was under the impression that the city was still at war, and that was the reason for her reference to just a few months more. She’s got a terrific sense of humor and I love her sarcasm. Would James have given a more precise location? Great story, looking forward to reading the rest.