You should have described his home where they were. Thanks«1» This is a Great beginning to a series. Thanks You for timing this further. You should have described his home where they were. Thanks«1» 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-10-01 03:42:15When you prepare version 3 do you think you could put in the necessary capital letters and punctuation?anonymous readerReport 2012-09-30 22:10:46it was really good until you introduced the demon. You should have described his home where they were. The getting and expanded emotions pule me closer to the charactors. You should have described his home where they were. This is a Great beginning to a series. the two main characters have no real relationship or reason for why he feels so drawn to her aside from her lookanonymous readerReport 2012-09-30 21:25:12I laughed when I esas the opening line. Thanks You for timing this further. Thanks«1» the two main characters have no real relationship or reason for why he feels so drawn to her aside from her lookanonymous readerReport 2012-09-30 21:25:12I laughed when I esas the opening line.
