You had a whole paragraph consisting of a single sentence. HE HUGGED THE WOMAN AND WALKED OUT THE DOOR IS A BAD BREAK IN SEQUENCE«1» The words don’t clearly describe what’s going on. The words don’t clearly describe what’s going on. HE HUGGED THE WOMAN AND WALKED OUT THE DOOR IS A BAD BREAK IN SEQUENCE«1» Except for submarines and then there is nothing but targets.tjgorlaReport 2009-10-23 16:32:03great story thanks for sharing.Anonymous readerReport 2009-10-23 16:15:52The run-on and confusing sentences made it a hard read. 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2009-10-24 22:20:49qine naneReal NavyReport 2009-10-23 18:43:36Navy Man, my ass. 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2009-10-24 22:20:49qine naneReal NavyReport 2009-10-23 18:43:36Navy Man, my ass. They’re SHIPS not boats. They’re SHIPS not boats. Boats are for bathtubs and rubber duckys! Boats are for bathtubs and rubber duckys! You had a whole paragraph consisting of a single sentence. I’m not asking for impeccable grammar, but it was just bad.robbiexxReport 2009-10-23 16:05:57AUTHOR RAMLES ON TOO MUCK. The words don’t clearly describe what’s going on.
