you don’t have very many mistakes at all! you don’t have very many mistakes at all! too many grammar mistakes for my taste. Anything you want to see from any of the characters?READERReport 2007-10-20 00:16:14meh, it was okay… Anything you want to see from any of the characters?READERReport 2007-10-20 00:16:14meh, it was okay… 910«12» 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2008-08-23 21:35:41Well its way better than the other ones. i really liked it and usually i can’t stand these kind of stories. ^_^ good plot line though.READERReport 2007-10-13 10:38:09Thanks I copied and pasted it to word to use spell check!READERReport 2007-10-12 10:43:22you have gotten so much better! I suggest proof reading it before you publish it.READERReport 2007-10-21 12:31:12I’m working on a second, any tips suggestions? too many grammar mistakes for my taste. 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2008-08-23 21:35:41Well its way better than the other ones.
