But I didn’t like your story because you rushed right into sex, and rushed thru it. The basic premise of the story is actually decent. Think about how you’d tell this story if you were in a room full of inquisitive and like minded people – you’d start slow, and build up to a conclusion by filling up your story with descriptions so your listeners would be able to imagine being you in this story. But I didn’t like your story because you rushed right into sex, and rushed thru it. then reality breaks and stupidity sets in.kcrit42qReport 2012-10-04 23:34:29it was good but needs workanonymous readerReport 2012-10-04 23:08:13No. My aim is to make you better. The basic premise of the story is actually decent. Stupidity and mediocrity continues to exist because we coddle the weak. Think about how you’d tell this story if you were in a room full of inquisitive and like minded people – you’d start slow, and build up to a conclusion by filling up your story with descriptions so your listeners would be able to
