I liked both stories and feel that except for length both are acceptable as stand-alone stories. I enjoyed the romance of the first and the justice of the second – THX
Fix’manonymous readerReport 2011-05-04 03:51:28Interesting dual story but I failed to determine which was believable and which wasn’t. Also the development of Mary as herself and not just a Sexual being in both stories. I believe that both should be further developed, either togeather or seperately. I believe that both should be further developed, either togeather or seperately. Further Charecter development as in what does Jack do for a living. Also the development of Mary as herself and not just a Sexual being in both stories. I enjoyed the romance of the first and the justice of the second – THX
Fix’manonymous readerReport 2011-05-04 03:51:28Interesting dual story but I failed to determine which was believable and which wasn’t. 3 comments«1»Happy RabbitReport 2011-05-04 15:58:16Both Storyies ar very good as type off writing called Comparison and Contrast. I both the girl is safe in the end. I am glad that she does not have
