you have less and less gay sex…Anonymous readerReport 2008-06-23 16:33:42okay………………………… the first chapter was good.. Just work on making the stories longer and making the transitions make more sense. no more incest… 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-14 20:58:48Nice twist with the sister being a he/she or he a guy raised as a girl. But yeah, don’t switch so much between scenes. But yeah, don’t switch so much between scenes. you have less and less gay sex…Anonymous readerReport 2008-06-23 16:33:42okay………………………… But yeah, don’t switch so much between scenes. no more incest… 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-14 20:58:48Nice twist with the sister being a he/she or he a guy raised as a girl. 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-14 20:58:48Nice twist with the sister being a he/she or he a guy raised as a girl. it is ruining the story line… no more incest… You need more segues between events.«1» Just work on making the stories longer and making the transitions make more sense.
