This could never be real because she would find her ass getting dropped and the 10+ club getting destroyed and blown up. Try to get better at storytelling.«1» The classic example is, “The king died. This could never be real because she would find her ass getting dropped and the 10+ club getting destroyed and blown up. Then the queen died.” It’s very rote and dull compared to, “The king died. Try to get better at storytelling.«1» It seemed like she suddenly just went along with everything, after her initial dismissal of Ray’s offer. I kind of hope she gets herpes and never is able to have sex again. I have suggestions to improve your story telling, if you’re happy with how you write, then just ignore the following. I got pretty hot reading it. I got pretty hot reading it. She is a horrible human being and I would be surprised if anyone cared for her.
