i feel parts of it were very rushed. you had great dialogue but kept smashing everything else togetheranonymous readerReport 2012-11-12 17:47:47Yum! My advice is take your time.. 2 comments«1»badbabysitterReport 2012-11-14 03:42:42Strong middle, but the run on paragraphs tend to detract from the story.. Great story. Great story. you had great dialogue but kept smashing everything else togetheranonymous readerReport 2012-11-12 17:47:47Yum! 2 comments«1»badbabysitterReport 2012-11-14 03:42:42Strong middle, but the run on paragraphs tend to detract from the story.. Hope it was true because women like you add joy and zest to life.«1» My advice is take your time.. i feel parts of it were very rushed. i feel parts of it were very rushed. My advice is take your time.. Great story. My advice is take your time.. Hope it was true because women like you add joy and zest to life.«1» 2 comments«1»badbabysitterReport 2012-11-14 03:42:42Strong middle, but the run on paragraphs tend to detract from the story..
