Don’t much want the the stroker’s votes. Don’t know about continuing. I just assumed most people’s thoughts were choppy like mine. The breaks with ID could help, maintain the rotation through the characters. I just assumed most people’s thoughts were choppy like mine. I’ll try to write the sex if I can’t avoid it. This, NOT. The breaks with ID could help, maintain the rotation through the characters. I think I should have only changed POV’s a couple of times there. CijaonehandedtypistReport 2011-03-07 16:35:46Fuck the complainers ssalo. Keep writing and I’ll keep reading.«12345» The choppiness was partly intentional and partly the best I could do. Top marks from me! The spacing threw me a little but not enough to stop reading or to spoil my enjoyment. redo this in Berlin, 1945ssaloReport 2011-03-11 01:06:44Thanks everyone. u’r critics a PITA! 22 comments«12345»anonymous readerReport 2011-03-20 08:22:23RpB/M: WTF! Top marks from me! 22 comments«12345»anonymous readerReport 2011-03-20 08:22:23RpB/M: WTF! Good writing, interesting plot, incest handled in a way that kept me reading,. I just assumed most people’s thoughts were choppy like mine. This, NOT. history?
