6 comments«12»READERReport 2005-10-15 17:28:10Hey, hope you write more, you still have five days to cover…. a good quicky is good every once in a while. In China? Work on characterization, plot development and descriptive language. Best of luck!READERReport 2005-09-26 11:18:28Well, now we have the titmans perspective. In China? In China? Better yet, devote more time to your next story. not bad«12» I’m sure you can think up some great stuff…. a good quicky is good every once in a while. The language was average (please never ever say ‘love tunnel’ again), the structure was OK, the plot left a little to be desired. Best of luck!READERReport 2005-09-26 11:18:28Well, now we have the titmans perspective. Best of luck!READERReport 2005-09-26 11:18:28Well, now we have the titmans perspective. I suggest you return to the basics of storytelling. How in the world could anybodsy say this was a good story???READERReport 2005-09-25 23:01:45Good, hot and fast. Where does she buy her tee-shirts, the childrens section? Better yet, devote more time to your next story.
