Frankly, I didn’t read your story all that closely, chiefly due to the god-awful spacing – it’s hard to read a wall-o-text. I’d like to be perfectly honest and say that, it upset me that the comment left by the other reader was mostly complaining about little technical things, and that they were actually wrong about most of them. I was grumpy when I read yours, and it irked me. I was grumpy when I read yours, and it irked me. Don’t let opinions dissuade you from writing whatever, and however, the inspiration strikes you. I re-read the story, and did find where the jock thinks to himself that he’s falling for this girl. I apologize for shooting my keyboard off without knowing what I was typing about. You clearly have a talent for writing; keep with it. My bad. My bad. Still, the commenter you were blasting, dwduck, made some valid points – and you addressed them. Finally to the anonymous poster on 2009-11-10 1:27:29:: We’ve all got issues, hon.
