It lacked description and flow and of course your use of the English language was attrocious. . . Learn to read and write English before you attempt another story. Learn to read and write English before you attempt another story. Urfantasyman92 it was a good start a little short but I liked don’t let the spelling police keep u from making a part 2.anonymous readerReport 2011-12-30 05:17:10I have to agree with one of the comments. Urfantasyman92 it was a good start a little short but I liked don’t let the spelling police keep u from making a part 2.anonymous readerReport 2011-12-30 05:17:10I have to agree with one of the comments. Urfantasyman92 it was a good start a little short but I liked don’t let the spelling police keep u from making a part 2.anonymous readerReport 2011-12-30 05:17:10I have to agree with one of the comments.
