To much narative and descriptive actions.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-17 10:15:38Very disjointed. MasterBaterReport 2013-01-18 19:54:14This really sucked and made no sense. It was so disjointed I couldn’t read on….Mr. Was not able to finish it.«1» What is up with that? It was so disjointed I couldn’t read on….Mr. To much narative and descriptive actions.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-17 10:15:38Very disjointed. To much narative and descriptive actions.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-17 10:15:38Very disjointed. MasterBaterReport 2013-01-18 19:54:14This really sucked and made no sense. I hope your future stories are betteral459Report 2013-01-18 15:20:01The plot is interesting but it was like reading a screenplay. It was so disjointed I couldn’t read on….Mr. To much narative and descriptive actions.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-17 10:15:38Very disjointed. It was so disjointed I couldn’t read on….Mr. What is up with that? I hope your future stories are betteral459Report 2013-01-18 15:20:01The plot is interesting but it was like reading a screenplay. What is up with that? It was so disjointed I couldn’t read on….Mr. 4 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2013-02-06 14:55:50This really sucked. What is up with that? Was not able to finish it.«1» MasterBaterReport 2013-01-18 19:54:14This really sucked and made no sense. I hope your
